Ja ich glaub auch es reicht....
Ist auf jeden Fall super geworden.... ;)

Ein klitzekleiner Verbesserungsvorschlag:

who is hotter than you know

ok, dann beschließen wir jetz einstimmig, dass unser 1. kunstwerk vollendet is (nur leider ohne melodie) und ich mach mal den anfang für nen neuen song(diesmal bissel positiver) :happy:

I'm walking on sunshine,-?
i'm so lucky-spritney
:saufen:

and I´m Strong enough to be your man

I love you more than anything else (Guillermo Marchena)

Thank you for the moment - Six

hm ich weiß nicht..... is irgendwie jetzt nicht das wahre.... oder???

wieso??? ich finds gut.

it's summertime-panta rei
and I'm glad to see you-?
:saufen:

okay,Leute,jetzt bin ich dran :)

Today I'm walking on sunshine
i'm so lucky
because I´m Strong enough to be your man
I love you more than anything else
Thank you for the moment
Now It's summertime
and I'm glad to see you again
Sitting On The Edge - Edwin McCain
you are so Beautiful - Christina Aguilera
I can't help myself - The Kelly Family

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I'LL Be YoUr GrEaTeSt FaN Of aLL!

also die Zusammenfassung unseres ersten Lieds :)

1.Strophe

Tonight I finally found someone in the shadows..
This is my life for you.
Hold me now in my dream,forever and for always...
And teach me to fly in heaven.
Is it worthless?
I don't think so,I need the time for this love,
so don't let the sun go down on me,although maybe it's out of reach.
But I'm a fighter..
and here I am, your natural woman.
Cause' I just don't wanna to miss a thing before a day is too late..
And how if tomorrow never comes, could it be magic?
Now I'm left outside alone,sick and tired..
So welcome to my truth!

Refrain :

Is my best wasn't good enough for you?
Must I always keep living in a lie?
Sooner or later ...you make me sick!
This life is a rollercoaster,we're just too complicated..
So I think.....it's time to say goodbye..
May it be a beautiful goodbye....just let it rain...
and wash it down
Then,after all...I'm okay

2.Strophe

It's really heavy on my heart and I've already paid my dues.
Soul deep is taking my breath away.
Your voices cracking the night...
I'm losing my religion,
but I promise..I will survive!
Don't dream anymore,it's over!
Love hurts...
and I feel how it hurts...

3.Strophe

However,I still believe that someday maybe
I will love someone else again
another woman...
who is hotter than you know on a beautiful day
Yeah!

:lach: So....kritik?

Wenn wir schon einen Refrain haben, sollte der auch öfter als einmal vorkommen find ich.
Und das bitte in IF ändern und ohne Fragezeichen :)

1.Strophe

Tonight I finally found someone in the shadows..
This is my life for you.
Hold me now in my dream,forever and for always...
And teach me to fly in heaven.
Is it worthless?
I don't think so,I need the time for this love,
so don't let the sun go down on me,although maybe it's out of reach.
But I'm a fighter..
and here I am, your natural woman.
Cause' I just don't wanna to miss a thing before a day is too late..
And how if tomorrow never comes, could it be magic?
Now I'm left outside alone,sick and tired..
So welcome to my truth!

Refrain :

If my best wasn't good enough for you,
must I always keep living in a lie?
Sooner or later ...you make me sick!
This life is a rollercoaster,we're just too complicated..
So I think.....it's time to say goodbye..
May it be a beautiful goodbye....just let it rain...
and wash it down
Then,after all...I'm okay

2.Strophe

It's really heavy on my heart and I've already paid my dues.
Soul deep is taking my breath away.
Your voices cracking the night...
I'm losing my religion,
but I promise..I will survive!
Don't dream anymore,it's over!
Love hurts...
and I feel how it hurts...

3.Strophe

However,I still believe that someday maybe
I will love someone else again
another woman...
who is hotter than you know on a beautiful day
Yeah!

Refrain

Bravo..... vielleicht sollten wir das mal an BMG schicken, die haben ja jetzt wieder Platz für neue Künstler, hihi :happy:

nee...nicht BMG bitte..die Plattenfirma ist echt schei**
Vielleicht die andere Fima wäre besser :lach:

Prost! :saufen:

Also,jetzt mach unser zweites Lied :cool: und dann machen wir ein Album
LOL :p

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I'LL Be YoUr GrEaTeSt FaN Of aLL!

Na gut, dann eben ne andere Firma..... aber den Vertrag bekommen wir ja jetzt eh überall.... :p :p :p